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Spare Change by ~Reidsan:iconReidsan:





Spare change? She asked, and I sighed,
but there was something about her face
that meant I just couldn't lie. As I fumbled
in my pockets she fumbled in hers, and
with barely a slur she said excuse me,
one moment, got to sort out my rat. Frankly,
I was somewhat shocked at that, but
I've got one myself and they're not as bad
as everyone says. With care, she lifted him
and cradled him in her skinny arms, mothering
her rat from all the world, protected from harm,
the rat squeaked back a child full of rodenty charm,
while I tried to keep my mind firmly on money,
in case she thought I thought she was funny,
and I pulled out a two-pound coin and handed it over.

For a moment or so, she didn't notice,
but soon she thanked me and went
on her way to wherever homeless people go
when they walk away. Then, later that day,
I got to the station for the train home, and
noticed I was missing my pass. I sighed,
bought another and felt a bit of a ass,
but then I thought perhaps she'd picked it up,
that I threw her a bone when she was down,
out of luck, walking the streets one rat away
from alone, and I couldn't help but smile
until I got home.
©2005-2009 ~Reidsan
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Author's Comments

original notes: Submitting this to urban as it relates to my experiences with the city. If you want hiphop, this ain't it.

I know a (probably) homeless woman on Covent Garden by sight. I like her, but she seems a little scared of me. This isn't a true story but it's written for her...and for what it's worth, in my head, I call her Michaela.

2009 notes: hmm. not happy with this one. erring just this side of delete.

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very inetresting... nice imagery u got there... but what i really like is how u manage to relate the homeless with a supposed vermin that everyone hates. Yes its true that alot of people despise the homeless and hates rats, and i can see that u made a strong bond between them. But my favourite part of the poem is when u mentioned "out of luck, walking the streets one rat away from alone," that was really good!!! :D :D :D Maybe i talk too much, but this is a dev fav!!!! :D :D :D

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Errr... I dunno how to sign from here =.=
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wow, very good poem! its nice! though... can you put "" for when they speak, cause it got kind of comfusing, =) but other then that, GREAT! ^^ :hug:
:iconchey-chey:
Good... it's all good... as usual...

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Make my pain your sweet, bloody nectar.

I'm collecting hugs!! Hugs recieved: 5
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nice one:D

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straight light moving and removing sharpness of the colour sunshine
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Aww... I love rats. I feed the ones at the top of the road. Even though I shouldn't...

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I'm so British, I shit monocles.
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Thanks a lot man, although I didn't really intend to say homeless people are like rats, because that sounds like an insult...

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I do writing. Do you do reading?
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Quotemarks seemed wrong somehow. I might put them in, it's just that I've been reading a hell of a lot of Bukowski and I like how he leaves them out sometimes. Then again, he's good enough to get away with it I suppose.

Thanks

Reid

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I do writing. Do you do reading?
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Well I'd hate to be "as usual" about anything. I must try harder!

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I do writing. Do you do reading?
:iconreidsan:
Cheers :thumbsup:

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I do writing. Do you do reading?

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